Some of the writing and voiceovers sound really bad. Don't get me wrong, you guys did an awesome job even making this, but some of that just has me facepalming because it doesn't sound right or real....
I am actually a rather skilled writer and voice actor. If you ever plan on making any changes or adding anything more I would be happy to donate my services.
I think the voices are really quite good, there are games with a lot worse and given that this is a private project, really great.
Regarding humour, I think Dark star one (german version, the english is really pathetic) can provide some inspiration.
As far as the story line goes, I think it is great - so far (mission 10/12 - lost count). I for what it is worth haven't come across a character yet for whom I developed similar feelings as for Jar Jar Binks in the first star wars.
Not really a criticism, but I would've liked to hear even more non-native English (or American) speakers out there.
Overall, this is not the "American Confederation" but the "Terran Confederation", so the game could (and should?) offer a whole lot of different accents (I actually really enjoyed the British accents!).
I'm kind of tired of hearing the same "default" American English all the time in games, it's time for some diversity!
Some of the lines from the "William Tells" commander sounded forced. I know production deadlines often force someone to sight-read, and he did quite well if that was the case. Even still, the stressing of some words broke the natural flow of the speech. At times it was like listening to an automated phone menu. One that was trying to tell an off-color joke whose laughs depended on stressing a word for double-entendre... And you fail to laugh so he repeats it with more stress. Perhaps that makes it sound worse than it was, but that was the best descriptor I could come up with. It just breaks the flow and sound robotic, that's all.
I've been largely impressed with the VA quality throughout the game. It certainly beats any other fan-project I've come across. I can nit-pick all I want what I'm complaining about doesn't really hurt the game at all.
Baws? Just assumed his tone was synonymous with his general attitude. I liked the guy.
I agree that 'some' of the writing and voiceacting is bad, but overall I'm actually quite impressed. I've seen multi-million dollar AAA games which couldn't measure up to Darkest Dawn in this department.